As Mark looked out the window in the car he watched the trees
blur by; he could see the reflection of himself. His skin colour was pasty. It was as
if he never seen the light of day before.
Mark turned his head to face Ruby. Every now and then he would catch her
staring at him out of her dark brown eyes. Then Ruby reached her hand out to
turn on the radio. The radio host's voice came booming out. “A quick news update
on what people are calling a miracle. I am standing with a man who had taken a
direct shot to the head and is still breathing. Sir please tell our listeners how you’re still alive.”
“I don’t know. The doctors say I should be dead right now.
No one has ever survived a direct gun shot to the head before.” the radio news
men carried on speaking. Mark ears perked up when he heard the news. Mark was
placing his hand on his heart where he was shot. Ruby turned to Mark and said “unbelievable
there been cases like that guy popping up for the last 48 hours. People just surviving
fatal accidents, I did not believe it tell I saw you. I mean look at you! You
look like you could drop dead any moment but your alive and breathing, miracles
appearing all over the place. Mark was thinking about what the woman was saying
feeling his arm for a pules. Mark could still not feel any pulse and still could
not hear any beating in his heart. “Say something kid.”
Mark found it annoying how Ruby was calling him kid, when
truth be told she could not have been that much older than Mark 2 to 3 year
older he thought. Then he remembered That man on the bridge that shot him, had
called him kid too. Mark gave Ruby a glare. Ruby jokingly said. “Do zombies get
hungry? You’re not thinking of eating my brains are you? The way you’re looking
at me right now really suggests you are.” There was a hint of fear in that last
bit Mark thought.
“No! I am not a zombie!”
“Woah their how old are you? 5.”
“No I’m 18.”
“You don’t say much do you? Well I am 21 for the record.”
“I don’t like talking.”
She stared at him she wanted to know more.
“Well I am afraid you better learn to like it because I just
picked up a total stranger in a forest. I want to know how the hell you ended
up in such a state. You own me for frightening me half to death.” Mark said
nothing. He just carried on staring at Ruby and thinking about what she had said
about miracles. Ruby looks back at Mark. “We
almost there now at great falls hospital."
A very interesting story Ben! The grammar and spelling are still a bit lacking but the story line, layout, and cliffhangers are all very engaging and well done.
ReplyDeletethank you I will be working on the next chapter soon. Just been busy with uni work
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